These concrete techniques guide a reader to the (MI) (abstract idea) of a paragraph. They make writing jump off the page and also make writing easier and ore fun for an author. Use these techniques to DEVELOP all ideas. (all ideas are abstract)
Below is an example of how to DEVELOP an essay and keep it UNIFIED
See how this works
Sentence 1: = Cultural and societal influences teach us to excuse our behavior. of the paragraph.
his states a fist point of view
Sentence 2: = Responsibility has been trivialized in the modern world another
This states a second point of view – It is abstract – It does not prove the above statement - it introduces another point of view you hold - A new MI.
Sentence 3: The words ‘taking responsibility’ carry the undertone of unnecessary hardship = another
This states a third point of view – It is abstract – It does not prove the above statement - it introduces another point of view you hold - A new MI.
Sentence 4: We are encouraged to find excuses for our actions =
and the rest of the essay followed this pattern………
LET'S FIX THIS and make it CONCRETELY DEVELOPED!
Let’s Look at Sentence 1: The MI of the above paragraph.
Sentence 1: = Cultural and societal influences teach us to excuse our behavior. of the paragraph
The problem is that MIs are all ABSTRACT. They are mere thoughts – you cannot: see, hear, taste, touch, or hear them. They are vague. The reader does not know what the writer means. Everyone reading has a different idea of what cultural influences you are talking about and what we are being taught, so how do you support it? Easy - you support it with CONCRETE DEVELOPMENT. watch……. I will first provide an example – then a Case (narrative example of when it actually happened) all in none paragraph.
Cultural and societal influences teach us to excuse our behavior. (MI of the paragraph)
There is actually a law on the books that states that persons judged not able to understand the consequences of their actions, who suffer mental incapacity, cannot be guilty of a serious crime. If you can get a fancy lawyer, a paid psychiatrist, or any mental health official believable by the courts, to agree that a mental condition exists that precludes a charged party from being punished. The "criminal" will not be charged with a crime. This individual may go to a mental health clinic, and given treatment on the tax payer's dime, With some tender loving care, recovery from insanity which excused murder, is possible. Insanity has been cured. Release is next. This person is freed! If this isn't excusing behaviors and alleviating responsibility, what is? In addition to ridiculous laws that allow murders to go free, if the charged party happens to be a celebrity, the chances of not being rightfully convicted are greatly enhanced. Several years ago such a case reached world wide attention. It seemed that O.J. Simpson an enormously famous professional football player, by all accounts and popular consensus of pundits and the average viewer, did commit the double murders that he was charged with. It seemed a slam dunk for the prosecution. All the legal experts, criminal analysis, and arm chair critics seemed to agree on this one. He did it. It may have been fancy legalese footwork, the circus environment that engulfed the trial which accompanies celebrity miscreants, or more to the point his status as a grid iron icon, but to the surprise and disbelief of all watching the he was found "not guilty!" A collective sigh of disbelief could almost be heard throughout the county. On the way out of the court, OJ smiling broadly mouthed the words, “Thank you” to the jury, and an observant viewer could almost see them smile back at him. I doubt anybody wanted to be responsible for putting a Hall of Famer in prison. (note: the last sentence is my CS=concluding sentence)
OK - I have only just touched the surface of "society excusing behavior" (the APOV)) I could have provided many more cases or examples from real life, as many as necessary to PROVE that my point of view is valid or at least worth considering.
This is how we
support a Main Idea - every time you insert your point of view\opinion
you must prove to a reader that you know what you are talking about, and
you must make your point appear in the reader's mind just as it appears
Here is another example of how to CONCRETELY DEVELOP a MI.
In another 4 sentence paragraph a student wrote.
For a young guy my cousin is very successful
(MI of the paragraph)
He got a very good job right out of college;
it paid very
well. His job also included some great benefits that provided him lots
of exciting opportunities
. Because he did so well,
his boss showed his appreciation;
this was welcomed by my cousin because he was able to fulfill a lifelong
. I am happy for him.
very good job =
Watch how easy it is to CONCRETELY DEVELOP the MI of the paragraph
For a young
guy, my cousin is very successful.
= MI of the paragraph
“Very Successful for a young guy”
Choose an appropriate rhetorical method for each paragraph:
There should one overall rhetorical method for the
entire essay: however, you can pick and choose
different methods for individual paragraphs. In fact, writers like different
methods. It keeps the
writing fresh and interesting. These are the rhetorical methods.
description: shows what it appears to be
example\illustration: gives samples, representation, models
classification: puts into groups
compare\contrast: shows similarities and differences
process analysis: shows how it happened or how to do it
cause\effect: shows what made
it happen or the results of what happened
argument\persuasion: stating opinions & proposals